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There Are No Vans
To me, what Thanksgiving really means is giving good thanks, not eating
turkey.By the time I was 18 I had created my Thanksgiving ritual (惯例).I would
go out shopping and buy enough food for one or two families.Then I would dress
like a delivery boy, go to the poorest neighborhood and just knock on a door, and
would always include a note saying “All that I ask in return is that you take good
enough care of yourself so that someday you can do the same thing for someone
else.” I have received more from this annual ritual than I have from any amount
of money I’ve ever earned, especially one such experience in New York City.
Several years ago I was in New York City with my newly married wife
during Thanksgiving.She was sad because we were not with our family.Normally
she would be home decorating the house for Christmas, but we were stuck here in
a hotel room.I said, “Honey, look, why don’t we decorate some lives today
instead of some trees?” When I told her what I always do on Thanksgiving, she
got excited.I said, “Let’s go someplace where we can really appreciate who we
are, what we are able to do and what we can really give.Let’s go to the poor
neighborhood Harlem and feed some people there in need. We’ll go buy enough
food for six or seven families for 30 days.We’ve got enough.Let’s go do it!”
We started by getting a van (货车), but there seemed no vans in all of New
York City.The rent-a-car places were all out of vans. My wife was disappointed,
and I said, “Look, the bottom line is that if we want something, we can make it
happen! All we have to do is take action.There are plenty of vans here in New
York City.Look down at the street. Do you see all those vans? Let’s go get one!”
My wife agreed and we took action.
Predict the story There Are No Vans
Ø What are we looking for?
Ø Do we find what we want? Why?
Ø What do you think the story is about?
To me, what Thanksgiving really means is giving good
thanks, not eating turkey.By the time I was 18 I had created
my Thanksgiving ritual (惯例).I would go out shopping and
buy enough food for one or two families.Then I would dress
like a delivery boy, go to the poorest neighborhood and just
knock on a door, and would always include a note saying “All
that I ask in return is that you take good enough care of
yourself so that someday you can do the same thing for
someone else.” I have received more from this annual ritual
than I have from any amount of money I’ve ever earned,
especially one such experience in New York City.
To me, what Thanksgiving really means is giving good
thanks, not eating turkey.By the time I was 18 I had created
my Thanksgiving ritual (惯例).I would go out shopping and
buy enough food for one or two families.Then I would dress
like a delivery boy, go to the poorest neighborhood and just
knock on a door, and would always include a note saying “All
that I ask in return is that you take good enough care of
yourself so that someday you can do the same thing for
someone else.” I have received more from this annual ritual
than I have from any amount of money I’ve ever earned,
especially one such experience in New York City.
What would I
usual do for my
Thanksgiving ritual?What do I get from
my Thanksgiving
ritual?
To me, what Thanksgiving really means is giving good
thanks, not eating turkey.By the time I was 18 I had created
my Thanksgiving ritual (惯例).I would go out shopping and
buy enough food for one or two families.Then I would dress
like a delivery boy, go to the poorest neighborhood and just
knock on a door, and would always include a note saying “All
that I ask in return is that you take good enough care of
yourself so that someday you can do the same thing for
someone else.” I have received more from this annual ritual
than I have from any amount of money I’ve ever earned,
especially one such experience in New York City.
To me, what Thanksgiving really means is giving good
thanks, not eating turkey.By the time I was 18 I had created my
Thanksgiving ritual (惯例).I would go out shopping and buy
enough food for one or two families.Then I would dress like a
delivery boy, go to the poorest neighborhood and just knock on
a door, and would always include a note saying “All that I ask
in return is that you take good enough care of yourself so that
someday you can do the same thing for someone else.” I have
received more from this annual ritual than I have from any
amount of money I’ve ever earned, especially one such
experience in New York City.
A general point:
I received more from my
Thanksgiving ritual
Example:
an experience in New York
City
Know the story--elementsCharacters
Time
Place
Event an experience in New York City to search vans.
my wife, I, the driver
during Thanksgiving (the 4th Thursday in Nov.)
New York City
Ø Why were we in need of vans?
Ø What does the writer intend to tell us?
p Little people can make a big difference.
p A friend in need is a friend indeed.
p Nothing is impossible for a willing heart.
p One good turn deserves another.
p ...
kindness
overt plot
Setting
Inciting
incident
Rising action
Climax
Falling actionResolution
Denouement
Events
A. We needed a van for loading supplies.
B. We tried our chance at the street.
C. We went to the rent-a-car places for
getting a van, but in vain.
D. Stuck in a hotel during Thanksgiving
we decided to help people in Harlem.
D
A
C
B
Know the story--plot
Covert plot
Time Events Mood
Before we
made a plan
My wife and I were _____ in a
hotel
She felt ________
When we
made a plan
I told her _______________
We decided to _____________ She got ________
After we made
a plan
We started by getting _____, but
found ___________________;
I advised to ______________
She was ________
stuck sad
my Thanksgiving ritual
excited go to the poor
Harlem and buy food for them
a van
there seemed no vans
available
disappointed
take a chance in the
streets
Weave the story
Paragraph 1:
We tried stopping vans as they were driving down
the street. _______________________________
_______________________________________
_______________________________________
Paragraph 2:
Eventually a van drove up and the driver said yes.
________________________________________
________________________________________
划线词分类
Character wife
Setting Thanksgiving; food; experience;
Harlem; in need; van
Action buy; knock
Mood disappointed
Event:
Mood:
Event:
Mood:
stuck
told
started
sad
excited
disappointed
attempt to get a van---in vain
disappointed/hopeless
succeed in getting a van
delighted/excited
话题词块
/
表达
Ø 表示失望：
p 叹气 She sighed heavily.
After several fruitless attempts, my wife let out a long sigh.
p 跺脚 My wife stamped her foot in despair.
Staring at the vans zooming past us, my wife trembled with rage.
p 皱眉 “Who can we turn help to?” my wife murmured with a fierce
frown.紧皱眉头
p 颤抖
My wife gave a miserable shrug. 沮丧地耸了耸肩p 耸肩
p 目光呆滞 She looked blank in a moment. 目光呆滞
p 蹒跚 With a dazed look on our face, we staggered away.
p 苦笑 She smiled a sad smile.
p 失望地看My wife darted/cast a frustrated look at me.
p 低头
I looked my wife in desperation. 绝望地
She bowed her head and said nothing.
p 摇头 She just shook her head in hopelessness.
p 哭 Tears of grievance (委屈) /ˈɡriːvəns/ came into her eyes when
she saw them left.
Ø 表示失望：
p 心跳加快 My heart thumped fiercely in my chest, tension overwhelming
me entirely in its power.
p 无灵主语
n All at once a feeling of hopelessness swept through me.
n A strong feeling of failure beat me out of breath.
n A sense of disappointment flooded in my heart, and hopelessness
frequently echoed my brain.
n After a long waiting, disappointment accumulated in our heart.
n Disappointment mingled with frustration growing inside me.
n Disappointment swallowed my wife. She sat on the ground and
didn't utter a single word.
n A sense of disappointment crept upon me.
n The unsuccessful attempts cast a cloud of gloom over our face.
more expressions to show disappointment
Ø 表示高兴：
p 尖叫 Hearing the words, my wife shrieked with excitement 激动的尖叫
p 心跳 My heart thumped with excitement. 兴奋地心直跳 (表高兴难以置信)
With a shriek of delight, She hugged me.p 拥抱
p 握手 I took hold of his hands gratefully.
p 点头 We nodded gratefully.
p 笑 Her eyes twinkled and her lips broke into a broad smile.
p 跳起来 Hearing the simple yes, we all jumped with joy.
p 哭 We shed tears with joy.
p 松口气 At this moment, we breathed a sigh of relief.
l we were wild with excitement/joy.
l we could hardly contain our excitement.
l we were delighted beyond description.
l we were floating on air.
l we were beside ourselves(极度兴奋) with excitement.
l we beam with excitement.
l Our face lit up.
l Our heart was thundering with excitement.
more expressions to show excitement
• A wave of happiness swept over us.
• A surge of excitement flashed into my heart.
• A sense of warmth flowed in my body.
Ø 表示努力：
p 用让步状语从句
n We kept on struggling forward, even though ___________________
n While _______________________________________, we never
lost hope for another try.
we knew it was hopeless.
the passing drivers zoomed past us without a stop
n _________________________________(as) , we continued to
wave at the passing cars stubbornly.
n We told ourselves repeatedly ________________________
(however), we wouldn't give in to setbacks.
Disappointed and fatigued as we were
however painstaking the task was,
n In spite of ________________________, we still believed in miracles.countless failures
p 用非谓语
Ø 表示努力：
n __________________________________________(be refused), we
decided to try one last time.
Having been refused many times
n __________________________________(咬紧牙关), we pushed on. Gritting our teeth
p 用强调句
n __________________________________(妻子的鼓励) gave me an extra
burst of energy. 迸发出额外的能量
It was my wife's encouragement that
p 用倒装结构
n _____________________________________________ (never) Never would we be defeated by the plight
Ø 表示努力：
p 用虚拟语气
n We summoned up/collected up/ plucked up/mustered up/gathered our
courage and yelled at the top of our voice for the fear that __________
___________
we would
miss a van.
p 用谚语
n Our heart sank at the thought of our failure to get a van, but we told
ourselves ________________________________.(绝不半途而废)never do anything by halves
p 用“the+比较级， the+比较级”
n We constantly convince ourselves that the more _________________
___________________________________.
efforts we put
in, the luckier we would be.
常见问题
未理清人物
关系：
Harlem 是地
点不是人物
无用的环境描写：
colorful与下文故
事发展脱节。
书写较差
故事太过冗
长拖沓
未按要求划线
优秀习作
22.5
本文抓住了故事的中
心矛盾——我们 的努
力和过往车辆的 “无
情” (turn a blind
eye/sped pass/ drown
our hope)构思和推动
情节; 用无灵主语和
外貌描写(fingers
numbed/
throatchocked/red-
rimmed )侧面烘托了
“我们”的无奈和无助。
结尾段用了时间状
语 immediately/
then/that night/
when等有序地推进
故事发展；并且用外
部寒冷的环境跟内心
感到的温暖和炽热作
对比深化主题“at
least we can offer our
kindness”
优秀习作
22
该文续写第一段用了
非谓语 leaving us
standing on the streets
/waiting for a miracle
和形容词状语
alone/unwilling 生动、
形象地勾勒出了 现实
的“冷酷” 和 我们的
“执着”，描写了故事
该有的曲折，合理地
推动情节的发展。
该文续写第二段用
了形象动词
hugged/discussed/
decided/knocked/d
elivered/smiled等继
续推进故事发展；
同时用了一系列情
绪词
anxiety/tiredness/
excitedly/joyful等向
读者传递主人公由
悲转喜的情景 。
优秀习作
该文使用了非谓
语（waving at...;）
only to...；无灵主
语
(disappointment
crept onto my face;
The gathering
gloom even
deepened my
anxiety)
牵动故事发展
文章第二段用
了with复合结构
“with butterflies
in my stomach” 、
非谓语 “Looking
at ...”、独立主格
结构 “tears rolling
down our cheeks”
形象地展示了故
事结尾 传递爱心
的感人至深的一
幕。
A possible version:
Para1：We tried stopping vans as they were driving
down the street. I learned something about New York drivers
that day: They don’t stop; they speed up. Then we tried
waiting by the light. We’d go over, knock on the window and
the driver would roll it down, looking at us in alarm, and I’d
ask if he would drive us to Harlem so we could help some
people. Every time the driver would look away quickly,
furiously roll up the window and pull away without saying
anything. My wife was ready to give up, but I said, “It’s the
law of averages: somebody is going to say yes.”
Para 2: Eventually a van drove up and the driver said yes. We
were wild with joy and climbed onto the van. Upon arrival, he led
us to a store where we bought lots of food and some baskets.
Together we packed them up, carried them onto the van and went
to buildings where there were even people living without
electricity. It was a truly fulfilling experience to make even a
small difference. You see, you can make anything happen if you
commit to it and take action. Miracles like this happen every
day—even in a city where “there are no vans.”
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